Jenny and Sarah were spending Thanksgiving dinner together, at Jenny's House. The girls were really excited about this year because Jenny's Mom told them that this year they could dress the turkey all by themselves. Jenny's little sister Madison, wanted to help too. But Sarah told her to watch them, because she was too young. Madison watched them wash their hands and do some things, she wasn't allowed to do. Finally when Jenny and Sarah left the room, Madison stood on the stool, by the sink. She tried to do the things she saw Jenny and Sarah do, but she couldn't. When Jenny and Sarah came back, they saw a HUGE mess.
Madison had accidentally dropped the flour, and it was spilled all over her, and the floor. Madison began to cry, and Jenny's mother ran into the kitchen. When she saw Madison, she scooped her off the floor. She told Jenny to make turkey sandwiches, with the rest of the turkey. Then she ran off to give Madison a bath. Jenny and Sarah, made turkey sandwiches for the whole family. When they brought the sandwiches to the table, Madison gave each of them a hug. She said she was sorry for not listening to Sarah, and ruining the turkey. Then everyone dug into the delicious sandwiches. Jenny promised Madison, that next year she could help dress the turkey.
Madison had accidentally dropped the flour, and it was spilled all over her, and the floor. Madison began to cry, and Jenny's mother ran into the kitchen. When she saw Madison, she scooped her off the floor. She told Jenny to make turkey sandwiches, with the rest of the turkey. Then she ran off to give Madison a bath. Jenny and Sarah, made turkey sandwiches for the whole family. When they brought the sandwiches to the table, Madison gave each of them a hug. She said she was sorry for not listening to Sarah, and ruining the turkey. Then everyone dug into the delicious sandwiches. Jenny promised Madison, that next year she could help dress the turkey.
HAPPY THANKSGIVING!!!
Narration is crisp and neat.
ReplyDeleteTip: Always try to avoid ambiguous usage and the mixing of tenses in one sentence. Moral of the story is excellent.
Well done, Aashna!